Ethnographic Observational Feedback

Two big things:

  1. Story telling is clearly my strength so I should play into my strengths to illustrate the story.
  2. Eloquent, poignant word usage and plus, it’s funny

 

Two bad things:

  1. Diversify the word portfolio; I used terrible 3 times in the same sentence where any other words would’ve qualified in the sentence so long it’s not terrible.
  2. While observing others, be sure to include my own experience of retail; why do I work in retail?

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